I have decided to can the vocals and just go for an instrumental (in the story sence)
As the world began to come alive with color and strange beings inspired by who knows what, I began to wonder why I was not scared. I began to feel more and more at home among the chaos. in a truly psycotic way, it was a beautiful land, trees with hearts, grass that seemed to resemble hair.
I began to revel in this until I saw something, a circle of dancers with an empty drum set. At first all I noticed were the dancers, they were hollow beings, not the fantastic creatures I described earlier, these... things, they had no eyes, no teeth or lips, they were famished, unmoving, but all of a sudden I knew what it was I was meant to do. I walked over to the set and sat down, it had already been fit to my liking, two crash cymbals, a splash cymbal, ryde, two toms, etc.
As I sat down, the broken, bent figures began to straighten up, though they maintained their colorless husk like state.
Once they were fully straightened, I found a slow but strong beat in my head and started off light, not even hitting the center of the snare, just the rim, there was almost no sound. As I did this, the dancers began to move, awkwardly at first but they soon found the beat. I began to slowly increasing the volume as well as the complexity of the rather plain drum line. I found as i picked up, so did the dancers, though they still lacked the spirit of their true calling.
I continued my climb in complexity, adding a few twists and turns here and there. As I did, I found that the dancers were regaining their color, they began to fill in, gradually still. It was when I broke into an eight beat fill to switch over to the ride cymbal, which had a more rich sound than the tinny hi hat, that things changed, for as i hit the crash, they seemed to explode in color, soon eyes appeared, and they began to flow like water rather than programmed machines. It was beautiful, an it seemed to last for centuries, but then my alarm went off, time for school.
I'm a little lost here. This drummer is having a strange dream, right? Give some thought to why he's having this dream--or, more importantly, what you want us to conclude about him from the fact that he's having the dream. Dreams (in stories) are usually revealing or significant in some way. Right now, I'm not sure what to conclude. It just seems like a crazy dream. Help me make sense of the scene and understand the significance of the dream.
ReplyDeletei think the idea is kind f confusing, and i dont really get it. but the actual writing is good and it has good details
ReplyDeleteThis story starts off where the previous one ends, i can see how it can be kind of confusing
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